My
strong determination on practicing my plan used to last three days. Should I be
defined by what I thought of, or what I actually did? Although it is common
sense that people are defined by what they do, majority of people are often
blinded by their sweet words. However, looking back to previous world top
leaders, we should rather define people by how they act.
Anyone can talk after a short practice, pretending they are prestigious
leaders who care a lot for the good of his citizens. On the other hand, the
world has never got in touch with a leader who practiced all his words into
reality. In other words, while words can be all lies, actions never lie. This
is exactly why Presidents, no matter what country they govern, often get cruel
slash by his citizens few months after inauguration. Before the inauguration,
since Obama was able to do nothing on any main issue, he gushed out all kinds
of words that could possibly satisfy the citizens. Now, he failed to satisfy
Americans with his actions, and finally Americans are evaluating their leader
in a correct way: they are defining a person with what he does.
Words and thoughts do not bear unforgetful results, while actions do.
Material consequences are created when an individual acts in a certain way. For
instance, Benjamin Franklin did many activities that other people are all
willing to do, but merely give up, for they are so tiresome. He came to be
known as clean, white leader, who is more diligent than anyone else. As a
result, many citizens started to admire and wanted to go after his path. His
hardworks had payed off, and just like him, people create results that comes
after their actions.
Not many great public speakers who spit out touching words are greatly
admired by majority. Instead, real action-takers like Mahatma Gandhi and Rosa
Parks capture the mind of people. This is one of the reasons why people are
more likely to be defined by what they do. Gandhi was not a mere talker; he
weaved his own clothes with his own spinning wheel. He also wore simple white
cloth, not covering his body properly. He did not fight against England with
weapons. This actions not only touched citizens’ mind but also England leaders’.
Rosa Parks was similar; She quietly demonstrated against white by sitting on
white-only seats on the buses.
To
sum up, people are defined by what they do since anyone can talk sweet words,
actions can bear consequences and lastly, people are more touched by people’s
actions.
This sounds like a 8th grade essay. The ideas do base on actual good points, but they lack coherence.
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